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I feel the need to point out, there are certain details you can leave out from the speech bubbles:
"in an unknown city, without money or shelter" It sounds stilted and forced. Perhaps change it to something like, "Now where are we?" It's punchier, flows smoother, and it gets the point across.
Otherwise, the rest of it's fine. ^^
"in an unknown city, without money or shelter" It sounds stilted and forced. Perhaps change it to something like, "Now where are we?" It's punchier, flows smoother, and it gets the point across.
Otherwise, the rest of it's fine. ^^